On the 20th of February, my class had a trip to Singapore. We had so much fun! We flew to Changi from Husein at around 10am. The flight was extremely different than other usual flight that i usually have because i flew together with my classmates which was really fun! We arrived at Changi at 12am and moved to Hostel at Yio Chu Kang. After having a rest for a while, we visited Science Centre by using MRT.
Day 2 is one of my favourite day at Singapore. We played at USS (Universal Studio Singapore). We played from 12am untill 6pm. There are various rides. The most exciting ride is cylon. It is a kind of roller coaster which is super fast and high. We were very merry that we had given a chance to play together in USS, but we were very exhausted!
The rest 4 days, we had to study in school ( Anderson Secondary School). The school is very big. The students are very friendly too. I met many new friends there.
My favourite subject in that school is cooking. Me and my partner made some pizza(s). The pizza(s) that were made by us were rose pizza(s). Rose pizza is a kind of pizza that shaped like a rose. I know the name of the pizza (rose pizza) from my teacher at Anderson. We put a lot of cheese on the pizza because we both (me and my partner) like cheese. At the end of the subject, we created very delicious pizza(s). We got 9 for our job and i think it was quite a good mark.
These are the pizza(s) that we made.
Seriously the taste was very delicious. Especially the melted cheese!
We visited Marina Barrage. I forget the day when we visited this place. It was a great place! I took some photos while visiting Marina Barrage.
Other nice place that we visited in Singapore is Gardens By the Bay. It is such a pretty garden. The prettiest view in Gardens By the Bay is the performance of light. We all enjoyed watching the movement of light.
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We came back to Indonesia on 26th of February. Our trip was over, i got a lot of lessons while having a trip there. I won't ever forget this incredible trip!
I think that you didn't tell the story nicely on the days that you visited Singapore. The sentences are just too short to make the readers understand what you're talking about. The tenses used are also still mixed up. I like the way that you put many pictures that makes it interesting. But, I suggest that you can give captions in the pictures to tell what/where it is. Overall, I hope that you can improve more in this writing.
ReplyDeleteI think you did a great job, you put a lot of pictures which is great. You explained your trip clearly
ReplyDeleteyour composition is great. I think there's no grammar mistakes and it was nice that you put some pictures there. But I suggest you to explain more about the school ^^
ReplyDeleteI think that your writing is quite okay. However, you did not describe the events specifically. I noticed that you still got your grammar jumbled up. Also, conjunctions will make your sentence way better and less boring. The pictures you provided made your writing more interesting. Good job!
ReplyDeletewhat a nice experience! but i think it would be nicer if you explain each days not only day 2 and the rest 4 days. the pictures are good. and your explanation about your cooking class there is quiet good
ReplyDeleteYour writting is good, but i found 1 mis spelling in your writting. You should have check the post before you post it. I hope you can learn a lesson from my comments and good luck!
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